No Fear Blogfest
Writes of Passage
Let me just say that I am posting *live* from New York City at the SCBWI conference. I'm staying at the Grand Hyatt that overlooks Grand Central Station... above which is a sculpture of my good friend Hermes (or Mercury for you Romans out there). So, you know I'm in good hands.
Thank you to Dominic de Mattos over at "Writes of Passage" for hosting this "No Fear" Blogfest. At first sight, the title made me think of a line of clothing called "No Fear" and they used to have catchy little empowerment statements on them. Loved those t-shirts!
In this blog we are charged with posting a scene wherein your main character experiences fear and overcomes it. In this scene from my Caenus WIP, Caenus must mount a bull and stay on for five drops of the judges hand. This is the first competition at the games. Some have already tried and failed before him... Some simply received broken limbs for their troubles. Some perished.
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Caenus stepped into the ring and considered his best tactic. Muscles tensed. Fists clenched. Thump-thump, Thump-thump. Thump-thump, Thump-thump. The lumps in his throat pulsed in time with his racing heart. His parched throat contrasted his moist palms as the soles of his sandals indented the sand.
The judges finished infuriating the bull. Just before they released it, they stuck it in the rear with a hot fire poker, glowing red as the evening sun. With a cry, the bull shot forth from the corner.
Perspiration rushed from Caenus’ forehead as he sprinted to his right. The bull turned sharply in pursuit. The prince turned left then right, and then left again, the bull's nose nudging his backside. Caenus swore he felt the rough shave of teeth at his hip.
The bull’s searing breath against his lower back, Caenus performed another series of sharp pivots, but found himself cornered by the snorting steer who stopped a moment and seemed to savor its prey. Crimson eyes bulging with fury, the bull inched closer to its subject.
Caenus’ muscles twitched. He considered darting to a safer area. The bull tipped its ivory to quell the thoughts of escape. The bull inched closer, licking its chops, eyes blazing rage, cloven hooves pawing at the sand. Closer, and closer it drew.
Images of Caenus’ brothers flashed before his eyes. Then images of his father and mother. He wondered if the bull would rob him of the opportunity to see his family again. He decided not to go down without a fight.
With no other options, Caenus summoned all the courage he could muster. He balled his fists and delivered a crushing blow to the bull square in the nose. Hitting the bull with first his right then his left fist, he stopped the bull in its tracks long enough to mount its back and ride for five drops of the judge’s hand. He held fast to the gleaming ivory, but barely. Dismounting proved to be more difficult.
The enraged bull launched Caenus high into the air. He landed on his right hip before rolling in the direction opposite the bull’s path. Rising to his feet as the bull turned vengefully, he exited the ring. Safe.
Caenus dropped to his knees outside the ring, gasping for air and reason. Running his hands over his body, he uttered a breathless
prayer to the gods, thanking the Olympians for preserving him.
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ReplyDeleteCaenus really does put himself through hell! Mad gorgeous male.
Great feel to this, re the action. Ha ha, could smell the bull and sensed the adrenaline rush Ceanus' experienced.
Have you seen "Forcadas" in action within a bullring? Talk about suicide squads. Mad or what?
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What Man has done for sport and praise in centuries past! You did a riveting job of detail and description. Really evocative job, Roland
ReplyDeleteGreat imagery going on in here and suspense for what happens. I enjoyed the read. Thanks for posting!
ReplyDeleteExcellent job of showing. Very exciting.
ReplyDeleteI was going to attend that conference, but something unforeseen came up. Have a wonderful time.
Michael
I loved the line about "shave of teeth" at his hip. Very realistic and so close a call! Great action and pacing.
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Thanks so much for the great comments. I apologize for not being able to get around to all the other entries. I'm currently at SCBWI Con in NY. I'll try to get around next week.
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Oooh nice! Poor Caenus, but good for him, he made it! YAY!
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I felt like I saw, heard, and felt everything through his eyes. Caenus is very brave! Loved it.
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So what happens next is my question? Nice one for Canus...
ReplyDeleteThis is a great depiction of the primal contest between man and beast. Nice one.
ReplyDeleteI think I held my breath throughout the whole piece! Wonderful depiction of the fight - and VERY brave!
ReplyDeleteYou did a great job of building the tension and the threat. There is no doubting Caenus' bravery!
ReplyDeleteWell done and thanks for entering my blogfest. :)
:Dom
Great bravery in the face of an enraged beast. Your descriptions were detailed and evocative, I was transported there. Caenus is very brave, yet I feel his adventures are not over.
ReplyDeleteWhat a fun read! I was relieved right along with Caenus at the end there when he's feeling his body to make sure he's survived. Nice job with this!
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Great scene, lots of action. Very dynamic MC :O)
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