This will probably be my final blogfest post from my Caenus WIP. (subsequent blogfests will likely feature other WIP's I have in the cooker.) In this scene, Caenus, who has been doggedly pursuing Adriande, finally gets his chance to kiss her.
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Cupping their hands and dipping them into the basin, they both took a few sips of water and then paused for a moment, turning to face one another in the half-light. Caenus tensed, sensing the perfect moment had come. His gaze locked on her. Neither moved an inch.
Go for it. It won’t get any better than this. Caenus grabbed her right hand with his left. He waited. She didn’t jerk away.
He extended his right hand upward. Caressing her shoulder, he slowly moved his hand to the back of her neck. Pulling her close, the space between them evaporated and their lips grazed several times before joining. A slight jolt of energy shocked Caenus, and held him frozen as she returned his kiss. His heart beat faster. She stole his breath.
Their lips broke contact. He inhaled deeply. Completely enveloped in her rose-petal and honeyed essence, Caenus struggled for words, but found none. After staring at one another for a collection of moments, Adriande giggled.
“You do something to me, Caenus of Iolkos,” she breathed.
When Caenus finally caught his breath, he responded, “Likewise.”
Adriande threw her arms around his neck and squeezed tightly. The embrace lingered as they simply enjoyed the closeness.
“I’ll make you deal, Caenus. If you can win the games, perhaps I’ll come visit your Iolkos.”
Delectable!
ReplyDeleteOooh, me likey. I love the line: “You do something to me, Caenus of Iolkos,” she breathed.
ReplyDeleteLove it, the build up, anticipation, Amore'!
ReplyDeleteNice tension. I especially liked 'their lips grazed several times before joining."
ReplyDelete"A slight jolt of energy shocked Caenus, and held him frozen as she returned his kiss. His heart beat faster. She stole his breath."
ReplyDeleteVery sweet!!!
This isn't a genre I regularly read, so thanks for the nice introduction! Good luck with your new WIPs as well!
ReplyDeleteerica
Very swoon worthy, indeed! Love the setting. :)
ReplyDeleteSounds magical...kissing scenes are the BEST!
ReplyDeleteAdore the setting, totally lovely.
ReplyDeleteThis is so different from anything I've read before... I really like it! Your style is very romantic, and this scene is so sweet. Great job!
ReplyDeleteThis was so SWEET! Totally loved this scene. I love first kiss scenes and this I think was the sweetest I've ever read.
ReplyDeleteVery pretty scene! Love the way their lips graze a few times before the actual kiss. Very nice.
ReplyDeleteTight writing :) I love the focus on each step he took, it feels super realistic. Thanks for sharing!
ReplyDeleteYou all make me blush!! Thank you all for commenting. It was fun to write that scene. *HUGS* to you all.
ReplyDeleteI love the line "the space between us evaporated", it's a lovely visual of them connecting without resistance and is a great continuance of the water imagery which we see more of when he is "frozen" by her. I also liked how time seemed to slow and he became hyper-aware of his actions (left hand, right hand)-- it did wonders for the tension, I could really feel his (first kiss?) apprehension.
ReplyDelete- Sophia.
Hey! A guy who can write love scenes! I'm impressed.
ReplyDeleteAw, I love that he was nervous about kissing her and then surprised when she actually kissed him back. And there is something about the not-quite-so-romantic "Likewise" when he answers her back that makes him that much more adorable in this scene. Great job!
ReplyDeleteVery beautiful! Great visual!
ReplyDelete"You do something to me..."
ReplyDeleteLove it!
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