Saturday, October 2, 2010

"They're People Too" Blogfest Entry


 Thank you to Tessa Conte over at "Tessa's Blurb" for hosting this blogfest entitled "They're People Too!" In this blogfest we were charged with personifying an abstract concept. As some who've read my snippits before can attest, I like bringing the weather to life.
 The following entry is from my third book in my "Caenus" trilogy. 
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At the Iolkosian base on the shores of Ares’ Altar, campfires pitched flames skyward as guardsmen gazed, keeping vigilant watch for any movement.  Their eyes, great deceivers, told them the untruth that all was calm. Only their fluttering hearts could have detected reality. All but too late, as if they realistically had had a chance to defend themselves at all.
            With shocking brutality, Boreas, the vicious winged god of the north wind combined with Kaikos, god of the northeast wind, and the Anemoi-Thuellai tempests, spewing a devouring compilation of storm winds down upon the Iolkosian base camp. Appearing as four, immense, ghost-white mares stampeding across the rough, uneven plain, the wicked Anemoi-Thuellai disintegrated into an invisible fury that wrought swift havoc on the unsuspecting marines and ships.
            The winds churned the earth, howling like rabid wolves, destroying everything in their paths, and tearing blades of grass from the soil.  Men flew in to the air, crashing to the ground like rain. Boreas ripped tents to shreds, leaving them to drift in the air.  The ships were pushed back over the sharp rocks, tearing the hull bottoms. Kaikos crashed the ships together like children’s toys, splinters strewn across the beachhead.  When the display of brute strength ended, nothing stood. Not a tent. Not a ship. Not a man. Nothing.
            And, as quickly as they had appeared, the winds returned from whence they’d come, clearing the night sky.  The stars shone down unhindered upon the devastation.  Selene’s moon begrudgingly illuminated the remains.

15 comments:

  1. Hi,

    Oh nicely executed and in flourishing style one has now come to expect from your realm!

    <a curtsy in admiration)

    best
    F

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  2. I've always enjoyed Greek mythology. Your writing really brings it to life!

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  3. Thanks so much for the comments!

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  4. Intense.

    I like the image of the Gods as white horses, stampeding through the camp and surroundings.

    I heard it and saw it all as read it. The imagery was vividly drawn.

    Well done Chris.

    BTW: I like your new layout. Way cool.

    .......dhole

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  5. Your entry conjured up a nice image in my head. The winds and water played well together. Great story!

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  6. Powerful imagery of what can be a very powerful force. Good job. :)

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  7. Well done my dear! That's a fantastic entry!

    Your writerly tidbits always put this image in my head, this Wise Man sitting at the campfire, telling his tribe their stories while the flames crackle away and thunder booms in the distance... (translated that means I like your way of storytelling).

    Tessa.xx

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  8. Oh how I love mythology. I saw "Ares" and got excited. Nothing beats Greek myths IMHO. Loved the winds being horses. Very cool stuff! :)

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  9. Funny you say that, Tessa... because that's *exactly* what I'm going for. Thanks so much!

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  10. @KM, it seems we posted simultaneously! lol! Thanks. Glad you liked it.

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  11. Wonderful piece. Very vivid and I too feel like I'm sitting in front of a storyteller listening to his tales. Loved it! :D

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  12. Enjoyed this personification. Lots of elements involved, which was really cool, and some good use of metaphor. Nice work!

    Scribbler to Scribe

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  13. Wonderful entry! You're writing definitely has that "other-worldly" feel to it. Something very rare these days and your descriptions are just enough to let the reader feel them without being over the top. Excellent job!

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